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Top of pagePrevious messageNext messageBottom of pageLink to this message   By David H. Charlip (Porlaquin) on Tuesday, August 1, 2000 - 07:53 pm:

"STRIKE OUT"

General background
Title - "Strike Out"
Genre - "Action"
Author - David H. Charlip
Phone Number - (954) 467-8801 / (954) 384-9692
Log line - For years we sought to overthrow communism in Cuba by attempting to kill Fidel Castro. We failed. Faced with his own impending mortality, Castro has brilliantly plotted to perpetuate the revolution by orchestrating his own assassination. Now everything depends upon our ability to keep him alive. We cannot fail.

Synopsis - With a cover plan to promote friendship between U.S. & Cuba called "Fidelity", Castro has arranged for the Cuban National Team to play the Florida Snappers in Miami as part of a World Series double header. This is just a cover for "Strike Out" - Fidel's real plot to insure antagonism between U.S. & Cuba after his death. Fidel has plotted his own assassination at the hands of supposed Cuban nationals, who are actually deep cover agents. His killing and the hostage-taking of the Cuban National Team is planned to be the inciting event justifying the deployment of Castro's own security force coupled with infiltrated agents to attack the stadium and provoke war between the U.S. and Cuba.

Luis Posada, a Cuban born former U.S. special ops. officer now with the CIA based in Miami must save Fidel and foil his plot. A former University of Miami star baseball catcher whose pro baseball career was cut short by a knee injury, Posada develops bits and pieces of Fidel's plan. He suspects that Fidel has assistance from a Cuban baseball star who has defected, but he does not fit all the pieces together until the start of the baseball game.

One of Posada's deep cover Cuban agent suspects is Snapper's star Helio Gonzalez, one of his best friends growing up. Although Helio came to the U.S. in the 1960's, his brother Raphael, a star pitcher formerly with the Cuban National Team, only recently defected to join his brother on the Snappers. Succeeding Posada as the starting catcher in college and then marrying Posada's ex-wife, who divorced him while Posada was serving in the Gulf war, Helio has given Posada every reason to grow to hate and distrust him.

Is Helio the ultimate assassin/deep cover agent? Was Raphael's defection conveniently arranged?
Avi Cohen, a former Israeli special forces officer who became acquainted with Luis in the Gulf war, has a martial arts school that Posada's daughter attends and that he teaches at. Luis and Avi are buddies and Luis turns to Avi for help after Luis's theories are ignored by his bosses and as it becomes clear to him that he is being isolated and set-up by someone inside the department which has been penetrated by Cuban intelligence. As Martial Arts/Paint ball tournament winners, Avi's students get to attend the World Series doubleheader. As the stadium is overrun by Cuban agents, and when all seems lost, Avi and his students assist Luis in foiling the Cuban's plot. In a final twist, the deep cover Snapper ballplayer is unmasked as he makes a last-ditch effort to kill the President.

Scenes: Paint ball war in Everglades; Baseball Stadium ; Invasion forces massing in Everglades and deploying air boat invasion force; jet ski chase in canal; Tae Kwan Do studio; Little Havana; South Beach.

All Rights Reserved - Concept WGA registered; Copyright 1999 David H. Charlip.

Top of pagePrevious messageNext messageBottom of pageLink to this message   By Alan A. Armer (Alana) on Thursday, August 3, 2000 - 03:08 pm:

MODERATOR ANALYSIS

STRIKE OUT by David Charlip (Porlaquin)
An excellent idea, refreshingly original and professionally organized. I would pay $7.50 to see this film.

In so many private eye films, the police do stupid things and take stupid attitudes so that the protagonist must go it alone. I worry that the CIA will appear arbitrarily unconcerned so that Luis and Avi must carry the ball themselves. Perhaps we will learn later that some members of the CIA actually believed the story and their agent or agents appear at a crucial point.

Do we need a romantic interest? Are Posada's daughter and Avi interested in each other?

Good job, David. You are obviously a professional. Have you written the script? I suspect you have. I hope you sell it for big bucks!

Critique by
Alan A. Armer


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