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The Jordano Protocol
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Top of pagePrevious messageNext messageBottom of pageLink to this message   By B. Simon on Saturday, March 4, 2000 - 08:48 pm:

We open on a celestial sky focused on the sun. It's flares reach toward the edge of frame as our attention shifts toward a particular fireball. An object approaches from behind the mass and hurtles toward and then beyond the edge. Two full years elapsed since the Alliance passed the rights to explore the feasibility of Jordano's Theory that made the trip a reality. The small group had been scanned, screened, and scrutinized in unprecedented fashion, but that was a universe and two weeks behind them as the excitement of the final approach neared.
They were a group comprised of six. A Flight Systems Analyst, a Medical Documentation Developer, an Alliance Representative, and three Subjects.
Their mission: to explore the validity of "Karmic Reincarnation Theory" which had long since been abandoned until Jordano had proposed the possibility of traveling back to specific coordinates where the subjects could observe (at least for this journey) their karmic predecessors in the hopes of resolving their observed psychological anomalies.
As the ship approaches the "cloaking zone" the crew members assume their flight stations and prepare for the stealth landing.
This sets up our story which eventually reveals that one of the subjects, Jilian, can indeed observe the embodiment of his soul's past life in the form of a small town Internet Time Salesman named Sam Corcoran. The unexpected occurs when Jilian encounters the love interest of his counterpart, a waitress named Leslie, with whom Sam is about to part ways.
Although Jillian resides in a cloaked dimension unobservable by Leslie each begins to sense energies unfamiliar to them.
Jillian in consult with the protocols set forth in the mission statement refrains from any involvement and resolves to remain an observer, but eventually realizes that Sam''s rejection of Leslie is the direct result of his anomalies. In his frustration over his predecessors' separation from his obvious "Soul Mate", Jilian, breaks the protocol and attempts contact.
Eventually, Jilian faces a potentially multi-life threatening decision. He can leave things alone and suffer the consequences or assume his predecessor's soul and correct the situation which took shape one hundred and thirty two years before!

Top of pagePrevious messageNext messageBottom of pageLink to this message   By Alan A. Armer (Alana) on Thursday, March 23, 2000 - 10:47 am:

MODERATOR ANALYSIS

A fascinating variation of Back to the Future. This is an intriguing and colorful use of the reincarnation theory. The name Jillian throws me because that is usually a girl's name.

Once Jillian reaches Sam's world, you will need more complications in order to flesh out your story. The most obvious: perhaps Jillian falls in love with Sam's fiance and now he is in conflict with an earlier version of himself. Perhaps one of the crew members becomes a part of this conflict.

Intriguing stuff, B. Simon. Certainly salable.

Critique by Alan A. Armer


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