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Top of pagePrevious messageNext messageBottom of pageLink to this message   By Alex Stirling (Stirlina) on Tuesday, January 9, 2001 - 03:57 am:

Logline: A terrified couple ignore stern warnings from both the FBI and local police, and undertake a dangerous search for their kidnapped infant, and try to unravel the mystery behind the true identity of their murdered babysitter. Based on the international best selling novel. The Susan Johnson Agency - 818-773-8031.

Top of pagePrevious messageNext messageBottom of pageLink to this message   By Alan A. Armer (Alana) on Sunday, January 14, 2001 - 11:57 am:


An exciting yarn that promises suspense and audience involvement. Apparently a different twist to the traditional kidnapping story.

It's difficult to critique a logline because it lacks detail. Who are the characters? What are their relationships? What is the basic thrust of the plot? So, alas, I can't be of much help to you.

If you're planning to do an adaptation of this novel, Alex, you should option the rights before beginning the arduous work of writing the screenplay. Write to the publisher. Find out of the rights are actually available. Studios frequently read manuscripts and option material even before it hits the market. The publisher may negotiate the rights or may refer you to the author's agent.

These deals can get complicated. Before beginning any negotiations, I suggest you contact an entertainment attorney who will guide and advise you. Yes, that will cost a few bucks but it is worth it.

Finally, writing a screenplay without getting an option is like buying a beautiful new car that has no engine.

Be sure your car has an engine, Alex, before writing what appears to be an exciting and commercial screenplay.

Good luck!

Critique by
Alan A. Armer

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